Proofreading

[simplen00b]

This may be of pretty limited helpfulness, but just wanted to say I'm happy to do any proofreading of readables, objectives, mission briefings etc of any WIP if it's any help.

 

(Double-double-triple-checks above to make sure there are no mistakes in it.)

[betpet]

Same here. Spelling and simple grammar errors can be distracting. Understandable from mission makers whose first language isn't English.

[Springheel]

I hope people take you up on that!

[betpet]

I'm hoping to finally record some dialogue for you lot but I'm struggling to shake off a cold that makes me sound like I'm holding my dose

[Sotha]

I'm always in need of proofreading when the mission release is coming. I'll turn to you when the time comes... Thanks in advance.

[simplen00b]

Spelling and simple grammar errors can be distracting.

Yup, especially for someone who's borderline OCD about it (like what i is)(grammatical joke there). Wouldn't say it's been a huge problem in the 20 +/- TDM FMs I've played so far - T2 FMs (the ones I played anyway) seemed to have loads more typos, although your second point may have some bearing here: -

Understandable from mission makers whose first language isn't English.

This has got me thinking (and possibly taking the post slightly off-topic) - how do the mission makers who may struggle with English* get their readables done? Is there any need for help in that area? I'd be interested to know. (I may be picking on an isolated example here - I played Silencium18's excellent 'A Special Delivery' last night and even though it's a short mission, I missed having much in the way of readables to add to the atmosphere.)

 

*I.e. Not those of you who speak/write English better than many of my fellow countrymen

[simplen00b]

I'm always in need of proofreading when the mission release is coming. I'll turn to you when the time comes... Thanks in advance.

Hope I'll be able to help!

[RPGista]

Will be useful for sure, thanks.

[betpet]

This has got me thinking (and possibly taking the post slightly off-topic) - how do the mission makers who may struggle with English* get their readables done? Is there any need for help in that area? I'd be interested to know. (I may be picking on an isolated example here - I played Silencium18's excellent 'A Special Delivery' last night and even though it's a short mission, I missed having much in the way of readables to add to the atmosphere.)

 

*I.e. Not those of you who speak/write English better than many of my fellow countrymen

 

I'm sure you'll be the same but I'm more than happy to write up some readables for someone in that situation as long as they let me know what they want them to say. e.g. a book on the history of Viktoria may need a clue about a certain room the thief may need to visit. Let me know the secret and I'll weave it into a short 500 word story to include in the book

[Sotha]

Let me know the secret and I'll weave it into a short 500 word story to include in the book

 

Somehow I feel compelled to link this thread for you, since it is related to this topic.

http://forums.thedarkmod.com/topic/12792-what-you-think-about-ingame-readables/

 

The main point that came out from that thread: readables are good as a spice. Too long and/or too many of them will cause "Oh god no more books" -effect.

[betpet]

Some fair points there. I guess it's up to the mapper but maybe 200 words is likely to be the maximum for a readable.

[simplen00b]

Somehow I feel compelled to link this thread for you, since it is related to this topic.

http://forums.thedar...game-readables/

Very interesting. To go even more off-topic: maybe it's just me but I really like coming across a readable giving a hint to something I've already found. Gives me a lovely warm glow of self-satisfaction about what a clever observant thief I am. On the other hand, the extreme opposite - reading a hint and then still not being able to find the d**n thing - gives me a dismal cold glow of vengeful frustration. (Interestingly, both of these happened in Heart of Lone Salvation. Fortunately the LWGs outweighed the DCGs.)

[RPGista]

I'm sure you'll be the same but I'm more than happy to write up some readables for someone in that situation as long as they let me know what they want them to say. e.g. a book on the history of Viktoria may need a clue about a certain room the thief may need to visit. Let me know the secret and I'll weave it into a short 500 word story to include in the book

 

I would REALLY like to get some help from any interested native speaker in fleshing out the readables in my contest mission, I have all of them planned and roughly laid out, but I'm pretty sure I'll eventually need some help with a bunch of them that I want to get right. If anyone would like to writte some atmospheric texts and personnal notes/diaries kind of thing, let me know!

[betpet]

I would REALLY like to get some help from any interested native speaker in fleshing out the readables in my contest mission, I have all of them planned and roughly laid out, but I'm pretty sure I'll eventually need some help with a bunch of them that I want to get right. If anyone would like to writte some atmospheric texts and personnal notes/diaries kind of thing, let me know!

 

Get in touch (PM me) and we can sort something out

[Sotha]

Alright. I've been writing my ass off today and I think I'm nearing of having all the readables in my mission on a piece of .txt-file. Any volunteers for proofreading?

[simplen00b]

Alright. I've been writing my ass off today and I think I'm nearing of having all the readables in my mission on a piece of .txt-file. Any volunteers for proofreading?

Yup!

[jysk]

I dont want to send pm's for that tiny bit.

 

Thats page 6 of my briefing i inserted after some feedback. Can someone look over it and say whether its correct/sounds awkward and if this is the case correct it?

 

Aside from that, the city itself offers a lot of opportunities for a professional like me. The Grimson's Bank has a branch in here. Perhaps, on my way back I could pay it a visit. For that I should be properly prepared, but my fence probably knows more...

[simplen00b]

It's pretty much fine as it is; I'd just suggest some small tweaks:

 

Aside from that, the city itself offers a lot of opportunities for a professional like me. Grimson's Bank has a branch here - on my way back, maybe I could pay it a visit. I'd need to be properly prepared for a job like that, but my fence can probably give me some useful information...

 

I'm not too sure if I understood your last sentence so I may have misinterpreted it. Feel free to disregard this - like I say, it's good as it stands .

[Sotha]

Of yeah, forgot the close this request. I no longer need proofreading. Thanks, SN!

[jysk]

It's pretty much fine as it is; I'd just suggest some small tweaks:

 

Aside from that, the city itself offers a lot of opportunities for a professional like me. Grimson's Bank has a branch here - on my way back, maybe I could pay it a visit. I'd need to be properly prepared for a job like that, but my fence can probably give me some useful information...

 

I'm not too sure if I understood your last sentence so I may have misinterpreted it. Feel free to disregard this - like I say, it's good as it stands .

 

Thanks for looking over it, i took over your second sentence.