Ebook cover feedback

[Moonbo]

So, as some of you know I'm working on a Dark Mod FM that I'll hopefully release in a month or so. The reason I got interested in making a FM is because I've been working on a novella heavily inspired by the Thief universe for the last year or so and ended up playing a lot of Thief 2 FMs while writing it. As I finished writing the novella, I found myself with some free time, and Dark Radiant seemed a lot easier than Dromed :-).

 

I'm just about ready to publish the novella on Amazon now (maybe as soon as tomorrow) and wanted some feedback for my cover. I'm very blessed to have a friend who is a professional concept artist but he's never played Thief before. I'm pretty happy with what he came up with, but since you are all Thief fans I wanted to know what you thought of the final product and if it was worth making any changes before I publish:

 

 

 

So, what do you think? You can find more of the artist's work at this link if you're interested too: http://jonone.cghub.com.

 

Edit: so he made the name font monotype and a little bit larger. Thanks for the feedback, book is up now: http://www.amazon.com/Shadowcursed-ebook/dp/B00BYEW02M/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1363951832&sr=8-1&keywords=shadowcursed .

Edited March 22, 2013 by Moonbo

[grayman]

I think it looks nice.

 

Your name looks awfully lonely up top by itself, though.

[Sotha]

What grayman said. Maybe the name should be with a bigger font?

[Fidcal]

The lighting and contrast is fine but make sure it's not darker in the final version else the bottom half might be really cursed by shadow and the title lost. It looks like filtered and processed daylight which gives it a moonlit feel. It has a mysterious feel which is good. The tiny gleam of moon/sunlight is just right.

 

As said by others, the author name is a problem. Firstly, get the font for that changed if nothing else. It could be montotype or else manually spaced and badly so. Look at the space between i and s then s and h for instance. Also it is rather too cramped horizontally - look how narrow the capital R is for instance. As for position and size, ask your artist friend (or yourself if you have the source art with its layers) to experiment with a better font but 50% to 75% bigger but then offset that dominance with slight translucency and possibly faint outline. He has an eye for layout so if he has a second look you can probably trust his judgement on that. Black is probably right for that; any pronounced colour might clash with the general tone and the translucency will help it blend.

 

Good luck with the novella.

[Sir Taffsalot]

It reminds me a bit of the FM In Rememberance of Him.

[Moonbo]

Cool, thanks guys, I'll send him your comments.

[grayman]

Here is a collection of faux book covers I've done the past few years for contests my writing group has run.

 

You can see a variety of author name placements and fonts and effects. It doesn't always have to be name + title + picture.

 

Hopefully you can get to these w/o needing login permission.

 

http://www.gather.co...281474977174550

 

http://www.gather.co...281474977817845

 

http://www.gather.co...281474978538950

 

http://www.gather.co...281474980421402

[Sotha]

"Sherrie Super - The Intestine Strife"

One of the most important novels of our time!

[Moonbo]

Thanks guys, I flipped him your advice and he changed the font type/size on the authors name. I updated the first post with a link to the now-published ebook. Thanks again for the feedback (and if you see anything weird on the Amazon page, please let me know as this is the first time for me doing this)!

[demagogue]

The background art is great!